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This turned out great, but I can see why you want to move on now. I can only work on a piece so long before I become blind to what is better or worse. Never the less, I have finally gotten around to what I should have done in the first place and made an edit.
I don't really agree with Ego's edit at all (even though it is pretty), because I don't think you need to give women make-up (eyeshadow, red lips with dark edges, etc) in order to make them look feminine. This is why I think this portrait is so interesting, because it's not the typical Barbie doll look. So I've tried to make her more feminine, without making her dolled up. Primarily by working on her jaw and her cheek. Also made some changes to her eyes, mouth, etc.
Not sure if it's an improvement, but at least it shows what I mean. Again, nice work.
By the way, why did you get the impulse to draw that woman like that?
It's a good piece, in general it's nice to look at and no distinct pixel-problems leap out. I made a quick edit to try to show you ome of the trouble spots. I also tried to fix some of the manliness.
http://i22.photobucket.com/albums/b330/maxdxam/portraitedit.png
First and most obvious thing is that I changed your colors. Your previous skin colors were nice, but bland. Also, the woman you're basing this on(around 0:42 in the video, right? Next time it would a great help if your just uploaded your specific still to imageshack or something) has a distinct red-ish tint to her face. These colors also have some greater contrast. I also added a few colors, for the lips. Those skin-toneish lips are okay, but I think that really red lips are something that helps add the more feminine look to piece. Slightly smaller eyebrows, yours started okay but the AA on them made them look a little too big. I also reduced the squareness of her jaw a little bit. This could be done even more, in my opinion. She does have a relatively square jaw for a woman, but I think you exaggerated it a bit. I reduced the amount of bright on the nose, it was just out of place. Also, outline all around the eyes. Eyeliner, you know? The eyes might be able to get a little bigger too. Overall I think it's definitely looking more womanly.
Soemthing I didn't fix: the forehead. Aside from a wide-open blank spot of medium skin color(you have no other expanses like that so it's a bit out of place), you didn't dither the highlight. This is the only place you didn't dither the highlight, and it looks a bit unrefined when compared to the smoother transitions on the rest of the face.
Also, this doesn't impact the appearance of the piece really, but I think the real girl's hair was darker.
Anyway, nice piece!
She have a surly jaw, neck, and something i can't say in the eye. i would apply some "elegance" in the shadows too. ;)
Actually, it's *supposed* to be a woman (albeit a woman with a squarer jawline than normal, since that's what my reference had). But even the jawline aside, something about the face still looks masculine. And I can't for the life of me figure out what it is. >.<
Well, my intention wasn't to say "she needs to have to makeup to be feminine" so much as "having the makeup tends to trick our mind into becoming more feminine" through stereotyping(not a good thing, but useful to take advantage of). Mostly though, I did the shifts(eyeshadow and lips and such) because it better matched the reference. I wouldn't say to do it to every woman, but if this is supposed to line up with a real person I would have done that. Also, I genuinely think that the lips are just a bit too flesh tone even without makeup.
Just an explanation for my own position of it. Your piece does the job too, in different(more subtle) ways.