Very flat, very pillow-shaded, and copy-flipped. There is no communication of form or contour here, except on the arms. The skin tone ramp you're using also makes what shading you have put on the skin feel gray and lifeless. I know I'm 13 years too late to be saying this, but I'd suggest doing some shading studies from life or from a photograph to improve your grasp on form.
1/5, but it's a start.