If it were up to me, it wouldn't have been allowed in. This needs a lot of work, and I haven't really seen any indication that you're seeking help to improve.
i don't think this should be allowed in the gallery in the first place... its one of those pices people later points when they are not allowed(as bad as that is)...
What is he doing? Counting the days?
Not very much good technically, but the humor is great.