The interrupt was supposed to make the highlight on his lower eyelid more pronounced and the curvy line on his hair is his skin showing through between strands of hair.

But you're right, it doesn't really read that way. I'll make a quick edit later today. Cheers. :D

Good.

There's an interrupt in the left cyan backlight line and that light curvy line in the lock of hair is sore thumb-like.

 Not sure whether I fixed it.

Now includes 20% more seriousness, though!

Nice, cool style.

The shadow line beneath the nose doesn't work though.