The ice cubes are bothering me a bit for some reason (not transparent enough?) but the rest looks great. Well done on getting third place.
Thanks for advice! I'll try to remember and avoid them in my future works (the bad thing that I don't get concept of banding ). Though I've never ever tried to draw transparency stuff, so result is not so impressive as it can be.
Nice entry =) I like the option of using horizontals and verticals to the max.
You might want to simplify a bit, all these lines make it a bit aggressive to the eye. For instance, the paper is too thin for an edge highlight and doesn't need shadows all around (unless it's warped, which would be nice and break the harshness a bit). The hand writing could use a lighter tone, esp the small text.
Ice cubes should have internal highlights on the opposite corner from the light source.
Needs some AA! Check that banding!
the lines are a bit harsh but its overall very pretty
The pencil is fine I didn't notice anything wrong the first time I saw it so I think your okay.
Thanks for feedback!
Though I want to object! There's no 'perspective' here. This pic is an acsonometry proection (like an isometry, but with different angles). Pencil can look like on my pic (though it doesn't exclude the fact that I choosed very clumsy position of it
). So IMO maybe from the 'art POV' it's ugly, but from 'geometry POV' it's OK.
Thank you! That was my first serious 'transparency attempt' . Glad that other people like it.
Thank you for feedback and critics.
Maybe you're right about pencil, but I don't think it's crucial here.
Also I thought about adding some texture on the table, but IMO my level is very low for this stuff right now, so my attempts could make picture worse and i declined this idea. And finally about more whiskey below the ice and detailed paper and letters... Of course you're right, but I don't feel myself to complete this goals in proper way. I'm afraid of drowning in the plenty of detalils and never completing the picture because of this.
In fact, there is no perspective in the pencil. It would looks like it is standing up if it was not of the shadow. Otherwise it's good (and way better than what I can do lol)
Very great job with transparency and the glass is amazing. :)
May I suggest some changes? the pencil might look better if it wasn't positioned vertically; you could draw a bit of liquid water below the ice; the paper and letters could be blurred where the whiskey is spilled and a little darker around it; some texture (nothing sophisticated) in the paper and table would look cool too.
Even with these suggestions, I like this very much! Nicely readable!
A bit of banding on the glass and the right side of the table, but the ice cubes and spilled whiskey work very effectively, great job. Very nice overall!
Thank you!